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Given is the bar graph comparing two separate age groups in terms of influences on their work productivity. Overall, it is evident that those aged 18-30 are more easily affected by the shown criteria than older workers and money is one of the most important factors in employees’ performance. A more detailed look at the provided graph reveals that there are two contributing factors, namely money and team spirits, that both play a vital role in surveyed employees of all ages, with the number of workers reporting to be affected by two criteria are nearly the same ( 65 people as opposed to 60 people respectively ). However, the reverse is true when it comes to such elements as “ chance for personal development”, “relaxed working environment” or “promotion prospects”’, while those aspects are among the most crucial contributors to younger workers, with more than 80 workers of this age considering them as decisive contributors, the figures for their older counterparts are just 43, 30 and 52 respectively. It is surprising to see that only 40 workers, both young and old combined, regard working environment as the influential factor in their work efficiency. It is also noteworthy that, as expected, only 21 workers in the 45-60 age group are reported to pay attention to job security, whereas younger employees describe it as a quite important factor, with 40 people

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