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Given is a line graph which depicts the figure of visitors to four diverse museums that are the Vatican Museums, the Louvre, the London Science Museum, and the Shenzhen Museum within the interval throughout the period of 1980 and 2018.

Given is a line graph which depicts the figure of visitors to four diverse museums that are the Vatican Museums, the Louvre, the London Science Museum, and the Shenzhen Museum within the interval throughout the period of 1980 and 2018. y7kVr
Given is a line graph which depicts the figure of visitors to four diverse museums that are the Vatican Museums, the Louvre, the London Science Museum, and the Shenzhen Museum within the interval throughout the period of 1980 and 2018. It can be generally observed that whilst an increasing trend was experienced by the Louvre and the Vatican Museums, London Science Museum showed a decreasing trend with the number of the Shenzhen Museum’s visitors remained stabil in the given time period. There was a significant rise in the number of visitors to the Louvre Museum from just under 8 million in 1980 to over 9 million at the end of the period in 2015. Likewise, Vatican Museums increased remarkably from approximately 5 million to just under 10 million over the 35 years period. The figure of visitors who went to the Londan Science Museums experienced a downward trend in the given period from 4 million to above 2 million. By contrast, the Shenzhen Museum remained stable in this period with about 4 million.
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within the interval throughout the
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of 1980 and 2018.

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IELTS academic Given is a line graph which depicts the figure of visitors to four diverse museums that are the Vatican Museums, the Louvre, the London Science Museum, and the Shenzhen Museum within the interval throughout the period of 1980 and 2018.

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