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Generally, every employee who works in a restaurant in England has a free choice over their clothing. Their lifestyle is also simpler, more comfortable, and depends very much on the situation, modern culture, and society. To create an atmosphere of individuality, all employees are allowed to decide their own dress code, but it must be somewhat equal for everybody.

Generally, every employee who works in a restaurant in England has a free choice over their clothing. Their lifestyle is also simpler, more comfortable, and depends very much on the situation, modern culture, and society. To create an atmosphere of individuality, all employees are allowed to decide their own dress code, but it must be somewhat equal for everybody. EwBVb
- In Vietnam, the staff working in the restaurant will not have the freedom to wear uniforms like in England, most of the staff will wear the uniform at the request of their superiors, and they will receive get a table of rules about how to dress, what they should wear during work. Usually it is not allowed to wear necklaces, rings, not to wear free shoes, but only sports shoes instead. This is a big difference between the attire of the service staff in Vietnam and in England, it is a special difference that creates the traditional character of each restaurant. Generally, every employee who works in a restaurant in England has a free choice over their clothing. Their lifestyle is also simpler, more comfortable, and depends very much on the situation, modern culture, and society. To create an atmosphere of individuality, all employees are allowed to decide their own dress code, but it must be somewhat equal for everybody.
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In Vietnam, the staff working in the restaurant will not have the freedom to
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difference between the attire of the service staff in Vietnam and in England, it is a special difference that creates the traditional character of each restaurant.

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IELTS academic Generally, every employee who works in a restaurant in England has a free choice over their clothing. Their lifestyle is also simpler, more comfortable, and depends very much on the situation, modern culture, and society. To create an atmosphere of individuality, all employees are allowed to decide their own dress code, but it must be somewhat equal for everybody.

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