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following is the graph that shows the rental and sales between 2002 and 2011. summarize this information in not less than 150 words.

following is the graph that shows the rental and sales between 2002 and 2011. summarize this information in not less than 150 words. GrpYo
This bar graph illustrates the yearly amount of rentals and sales of films from an individual shop from 2002 to 2011. Initially, during 2002, rentals were highest at 185, 000 count followed by 85, 000 VHS sales and finally 49, 000 DVD sales. While, Blu-ray sales remained out of picture at that time. In the proceeding year, rentals had a slight decrease to 180, 000 again, followed by 65, 000 VHS sales but an increase in DVD sales upto 105, 000. This trend continued in the further years, where in 2006, rentals fell to 140, 000 and DVD sales having a drastic rise to 200, 000 eliminating out VHS sales. Year 2007 witnessed the highest sales of DVD's accounting to 205, 000 and introduction of blu - ray with a mere 5, 000 sales, rentals continuing to decline to 129, 000. Since then, sales of rentals and DVD's gradually dropped down. Blu-ray sales were growing but not ata much significant pace. Till 2011, rentals were below 60, 000, DVD's came down to 180, 000 and 2011 managed to grow only upto 15, 000. It is observed that, over the decade, rentals had a drastic drop while DVD sales signifucantly improved. Till the middle of the era VHS sales vanished from the scene introducing blu-ray sales in upcoming years.
This bar graph illustrates the yearly amount of
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and
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of films from an individual shop from 2002 to 2011.

Initially
, during 2002,
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rentals
were highest at 185, 000 count followed by 85, 000 VHS
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sales
and
finally
49, 000 DVD
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sales
.
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While
, Blu-ray
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sales
remained out of picture at that time. In the proceeding year,
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rentals
had a slight decrease to 180, 000 again, followed by 65, 000 VHS
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sales
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but
an increase in DVD
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sales
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upto
105, 000. This trend continued in the
further
years, where in 2006,
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fell to 140, 000 and DVD
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sales
having a drastic rise to 200, 000 eliminating out VHS sales.

Year 2007 witnessed the highest
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sales
of DVD's accounting to 205, 000 and introduction of
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blu
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ray with a mere 5, 000
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sales
,
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continuing to decline to 129, 000. Since then,
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of
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and DVD's
gradually
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dropped down
. Blu-ray
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sales
were growing
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but
not
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ata
much significant pace. Till 2011,
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were below 60, 000, DVD's came down to 180, 000 and 2011 managed to grow
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only
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upto
15, 000.

It
is observed
that, over the decade,
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had a drastic drop while DVD
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signifucantly
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improved
. Till the middle of the era VHS
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vanished from the scene introducing
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blu-ray
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in upcoming years.
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