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flu rates for males and females

flu rates for males and females 8dBVB

The line graph illustrates the number of flu ratios between two genders over a period of 11 months from February to June in 1996. Overall, what stands out from the graph is From February to June, both sexes have an upward trend with certain fluctuations, until when there was a decrease till December. Initially granted, the rate started with 500 in both genders until April while males remained at the almost same but female ratios increased to roughly 1000. Following that, the flu proportion rose significantly from April to June when it was 2500 in men and 3500 in women. In July, there was a slight decrease tendency to 3000, while men rates stayed at almost the same ratio. Following this by males the virus rate drip to approximately 2000 but females remained at about 3000 in August. Nevertheless in September the ratios between two sexes gradually dropped to nearly 1500 in men while it was 2500 in women. Finally, after September, there was not any considerable change in the rates, although only a small fluctuation is observed in men, until December the rates remain at 1, 500 for men and 2, 500 for women.

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 between two genders over a period of 11 months from February to June in 1996.

Overall
, what stands out from the graph is From February to June, both sexes have an upward trend with certain fluctuations, until when there was a decrease till December.

Initially
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rate
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 and 3500 in women.

In July, there was a slight decrease tendency to 3000, while You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfatherbrothersonguyfellowhusband
men
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