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The diagram illustrates the difference between the navigation system and smartphone in prices of “high-tech” gadgets in somecountry over two years.

The diagram illustrates the difference between the navigation system and smartphone in prices of “high-tech” gadgets in somecountry over two years. gWrlg
The diagram illustrates the difference between the navigation system and smartphone in prices of “high-tech” gadgets in somecountry over two years. Overall, although the number of the navigation system and smartphones were different, the gap between both technology had closed each other at the end of the survey. Firstly, the navigation system which stood at 4000 dollars had decreased gradually the second half of 2004 until from the first half of 2005. Over the time prices of navigation system noticeably changed until the first part of 2006 had reached some amount which was less than 2004. Additionally, prices stood at 3500 dropped significantly by just under 2500 during the year 2006. At this time, smartphones levelled off 3000 in 2004, in comparison the smartphone’s prices less than navigation system although the gap between both marks narrowed towards at the end of the survey. Furthermore, dollars of smartphones markedly increased from 2005 until 2006 which was reached at the same level as two times in the one year. The prices of smartphones different from other years were maintained the same level at the end of 2006.
The diagram illustrates the difference between the
navigation
system
and smartphone in
prices
of “high-tech” gadgets in
somecountry
over two years.

Overall
, although the number of the
navigation
system
and smartphones were
different
, the gap between both technology had closed each other at the
end
of the survey.

Firstly
, the
navigation
system
which stood at 4000 dollars had decreased
gradually
the second half of 2004 until from the
first
half of 2005. Over the time
prices
of
navigation
system
noticeably
changed
until the
first
part of 2006 had reached
some
amount which was less than 2004.
Additionally
,
prices
stood at 3500 dropped
significantly
by
just
under 2500 during the year 2006.

At this time, smartphones levelled off 3000 in 2004,
in comparison
the smartphone’s
prices
less than
navigation
system
although the gap between both marks narrowed towards at the
end
of the survey.
Furthermore
, dollars of smartphones
markedly
increased from 2005 until 2006 which
was reached
at the same level as two times in the one year. The
prices
of smartphones
different
from other years
were maintained
the same level at the
end
of 2006.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the difference between the navigation system and smartphone in prices of “high-tech” gadgets in somecountry over two years.

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