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estimate the elephant population from 1994 to 2007

estimate the elephant population from 1994 to 2007 VBpq7
the diagram evaluates the maximum number of elephant population in a range of Asian countries over a period of seven years from 1997 to 2004. overall, in both years the highest figures was achieved by Indian, while the least value gained by china. Indai, Malaysia and Thailand were three countries where the elephants population decreased noticeably. In Thailand and Malaysia more than halves of population lost within seven years. Vietnam, Myanmar and Sir Lanka avoided such heavey losses, while China lost more than half of its population. in Laos the numbers in two years stayed the same but in Cambodia figure showed a slightly increase during these years.
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diagram evaluates the maximum number of elephant
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population
in a range of Asian countries over a period of seven years from 1997 to 2004.
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overall
, in both years the highest figures
was achieved
by Indian, while the least value gained by china.
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Indai
, Malaysia and Thailand were three countries where the
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elephants
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population
decreased
noticeably
. In Thailand and Malaysia more than halves of
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population
lost within seven years. Vietnam, Myanmar and Sir Lanka avoided such
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heavey
losses, while China lost more than half of its
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population
.
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in
Laos the numbers in two years stayed the same
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but
in Cambodia figure
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showed
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slightly increase
during these years.

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