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calorie intake of UK males over the ages

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The bar chart shows the caloric intake of UK males in three distinct age groups of 0-­24, 25­-49, and over 50 years old. Dairy for the 0­-24 age group was the highest source of calories, whilst the other categories each represented about 20% each. In the next age group dairy fell to around a quarter, and meat became the main source of calories, reaching half of the total intake. Pulses and vegetables reached 10% and 15% respectively. Pulses in the final age group increased sixfold to over 60%, whereas calories obtained from vegetables was 10%, half that of meat (20%), and even slightly less than dairy (15%). The 50+ group shows the most marked preference out of all the groups. It also confirms the gradual decline in vegetable consumption as males become older. Overall it is clear that each age group has a clear favourite which varies depending on age. However, vegetables are consistently amongst the least popular, regardless of age.
The bar chart
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the caloric intake of UK males in three distinct
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of 0-­24, 25­-49, and over 50 years
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Dairy for the 0­-24
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was the highest source of calories, whilst the other categories each represented about 20% each. In the
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dairy fell to around a quarter, and meat became the main source of calories, reaching half of the total intake. Pulses and
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vegetables
reached 10% and 15%
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Pulses in the final
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increased sixfold to over 60%, whereas calories obtained from
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was 10%, half that of meat (20%), and even
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less than dairy (15%). The 50+
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the most marked preference out of all the
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. It
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confirms the gradual decline in
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consumption as males become older.

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it is
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that each
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has a
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favourite
which varies depending on
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However
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are
consistently
amongst the least popular, regardless of
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IELTS academic calorie intake of UK males over the ages

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