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Employment for Men and Women

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The bar graph illustrates the number of male and female who aged 60-65 employed in Belgium, USA, Japan and Indonesia during a period from 1970 to 2000. Overall a clear link can be drawn retirement age meaning that in the countries where people work for longer. In some countries women unemployed higher more men. Regarding the full-time employed, obviously men had sightly the percentage of employed more than women for the four countries in 1970. In Belgium this figure difference equal on around 19%. And also number of male and female for employed figure for USA shows approximately 6%. Moreover the biggest difference in Japan illustrated around 24%. As graph shows, the largest disparity being the difference between male and female in Belgium and USA in 2000. Proportions of males and females employed decreased across all nations, especially in Belgium. This figure’s gap difference decreased in Japan And the percentage of employed were exactly same for male and female in 2000. In Indonesia, employed males fell to 72% as their counterparts slipped by 12% to 50%.

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 in Belgium, USA, Japan and Indonesia during a period from 1970 to 2000.

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, the largest disparity being the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdiversitycharacteristicdivergencevariationcontrastdisparity
difference
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 in Belgium and USA in 2000. Proportions of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
males
 and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlmother
females
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employed
 decreased across all nations, especially
 in Belgium. This figure’s gap You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdiversitycharacteristicdivergencevariationcontrastdisparity
difference
 decreased in Japan And the percentage of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoccupiedhiredengaged
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female
 in 2000. In Indonesia, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoccupiedhiredengaged
employed
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males
 fell to 72% as their counterparts slipped by 12% to 50%. 