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Robotisation in future human lives

Robotisation in future human lives DqYpo

First of all, the number of robots that is used in different places are increasing dramatically. In my opinion it will lead into a negative development. There are a lot of industries and. Companies are using robots. Because of that so many people lose their job. In other words, the number of robots will added only. Another important thing is robots are working based on the computer language. If it reached on bad hands then it would be a disaster. For example nowadays military are planning to use robots to transport weapons. If they reach in the bad hands, to be more precise, if they got in the enemy's hands then it would be a serious threat to the nation. Secondly, there are some risky factors in Thai particular issue. Safety is one of the major problem among them. Is there any problem occured for the robot it could become a threat for your life. For example, in automobile industries, most of the engine assembling was done by the robots. If teh robots are not working perfectly not only it would affect the assembling but also it would be a threat to the workers. In details, there are some robotic machines are there that is used by the workers. If that is not working properly then it could be harm them. Another one pressing problem is that the robots are highly expensive. For the smoother and perfect operation they need periodic maintenance, which is highly expensive that normal people can not afford. To recapitulate, anyway the number of robots will rise gradually in the future. If it is not meet their purpose, then it will create a negative development on the society.

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