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Robotization in job sectors

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It is true that, the robots are increasing rapidly in our modern world. In future, the robot will control all the job sectors. I have a partial view point on this statement. First of all, in our future world all the job sectors will controlled by remotes Or by a computer application. Through the use of robots we can increase our productivity. The causes of this statement are they are very perfect in their job and the safety is also a matter. They are usually works very perfect in all job sector and we can compromise them in the case of risk. That is because all the vehicle industries are being robotized day by day. For example, "Be at kiwizoo" a restaurant which owned by a mallu actor called Maniyan pilla Raju, which serves all the food items by robots in Kerala. Hence, through robotized we can simply assure the safety, consistency, risk and the happiness of our employees. On the other hand, it have some negative impacts. To be more clear, the first thing is that, lot of youngsters will lose their job through robotization. So, it will lead to a bigger cause to unemployment. In India, the unemployment rate is 7. 75 percentage. Through robotization in future, it will gradually increase from 7. 75 to 10 or 11 percentage. The second problem is that the government want to spend their 1/2th percentage of their economy to the maintenance cost of the robots. So, slowly it will be a financial burden to our government. Thus, in future the robotization will be a head ache to our nation. To conclude in future the robots will have a major role in our daily lives. But it have some positive as well as negative sides.
It is true that, the robots are increasing
rapidly
in our modern world. In
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future
, the robot will control all the
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job
sectors. I have a partial view point on this statement.
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, in our
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future
world all the
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job
sectors will controlled by remotes Or by a computer application.
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Through
the
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use
of robots we can increase our productivity. The causes of this statement are they are
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very
perfect in their
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job
and the safety is
also
a matter. They are
usually
works
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very
perfect in all
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job
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sector and
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risk
.
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all the vehicle industries are
being robotized
day by day.
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kiwizoo
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a restaurant which
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by a
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mallu
actor called
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Maniyan
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pilla
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Raju
, which serves all the food items by robots in Kerala.
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robotized we can
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risk
and the happiness of our employees.
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impacts. To be more
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thing is that, lot of youngsters will lose their
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robotization
.
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, it will lead to a bigger cause to unemployment. In India, the unemployment rate is 7. 75 percentage.
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robotization
in
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future
, it will
gradually
increase from 7. 75 to 10 or 11 percentage. The second problem is that the
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government
want to spend their 1/
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2th
percentage of their economy to the maintenance cost of the robots.
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,
slowly
it will be a financial burden to our
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.
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robotization
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the robots will have a major role in our daily
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IELTS academic Robotization in job sectors

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5.5
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