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Division of house hold task

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The given chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. It shows how men and women spend their time at home in minutes per day. It is evident from the chart that women spend more time in household tasks than men. However, men tends to spend more time in gardening and pet care as compared to women (that is 20 minutes a day more than women). Also, maintenance and odd jobs are done mostly by men in other words men spend approximately 15 minutes more in a day. We see a huge difference in time spend by women on cleaning, house tidying as compared to men – more than 40 minutes. All other jobs – cooking, baking, washing up, ironing, sewing are mostly done by women with a great difference. Thus, on an average women work approximately 25 minutes per day more as compared to men. Which means women are more active in household tasks whereas men are mostly occupied by their professional job.
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the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. It
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how
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men
and
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women
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spend
their
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time
at home in minutes per day.

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women
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spend
more
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time
in household tasks than
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men
.
However
,
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men
tends to
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spend
more
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time
in gardening and pet care as compared to
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women
(
that is
20 minutes a day more than
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women)
.
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, maintenance and odd jobs
are done
mostly
by
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men
in other words
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men
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approximately 15 minutes more in a day. We
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a huge difference in
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time
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spend
by
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women
on cleaning,
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house
tidying as compared to
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men
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more than 40 minutes. All other jobs
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cooking, baking, washing up, ironing, sewing are
mostly
done by
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women
with a great difference.

Thus
, on an average
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women
work approximately 25 minutes per day more
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as
compared to
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men
. Which means
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women
are more active in household tasks whereas
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men
are
mostly
occupied by their professional job.
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IELTS academic Division of house hold task

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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