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The line charts demonstrate the proportion of controlling three types of auto-machines and how many hours people in one country take up to do chores from 1920 to 2019.

The line charts demonstrate the proportion of controlling three types of auto-machines and how many hours people in one country take up to do chores from 1920 to 2019. Q5LlK
The line charts demonstrate the proportion of controlling three types of auto-machines and how many hours people in one country take up to do chores from 1920 to 2019. It is clear that the larger percentage of electrical utilizations are being employed, the less time people make for doing housework per week. According to the first graph, people have gradually taken advantage of appliances using electricity during a century period shown. In 1920, refrigerators were not common in daily lives with nobody using them until 1940, the figure for owning them witnessed a considerable increase to approximately 60%, compared to exactly 60% and 50% for washing machines and vacuum cleaners. For the next 40-year period shown, refrigerators have become the most popular home appliances with 100% residents of this country buying them. After having reached 90%, the percentage of vacuum cleaners that existed over the whole region also soared to 100% and became as standard as refrigerators over the last 30 years. Although the figure for acquiring washing machines dipped to 60% then climbed back and kept increasing from 1960 to 2019, it still got far from that of two other appliances. Looking at the details of the second chart, the number of time that population of this state spent doing chores experienced a significant fall from 50 hours to 20 hours per week during the first 40 years shown, then minimally leveled off year by year and finally came to relatively 10hours per week at the end of the period.
The line charts demonstrate the proportion of controlling three types of auto-machines and how
many
hours
people
in one country take up to do chores from 1920 to 2019.

It is
clear
that the larger percentage of electrical
utilizations
are
being employed
, the less time
people
make
for doing housework per week.

According to the
first
graph,
people
have
gradually
taken advantage of appliances using electricity during a century period shown. In 1920, refrigerators were not common in daily
lives
with nobody using them until 1940, the figure for owning them witnessed a considerable increase to approximately 60%, compared to exactly 60% and 50% for washing machines and vacuum cleaners. For the
next
40-year
period shown, refrigerators have become the most popular home appliances with 100% residents of this country buying them. After having reached 90%, the percentage of vacuum cleaners that existed over the whole region
also
soared to 100% and became as standard as refrigerators over the last 30 years. Although the figure for acquiring washing machines dipped to 60% then climbed back and
kept
increasing from 1960 to 2019, it
still
got
far from that of two other appliances.

Looking at the
details
of the second chart, the number of time that population of this state spent doing chores experienced a significant fall from 50
hours
to 20
hours
per week during the
first
40 years shown, then
minimally
leveled off
year
by
year
and
finally
came to
relatively
10hours
per week at the
end
of the period.
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IELTS academic The line charts demonstrate the proportion of controlling three types of auto-machines and how many hours people in one country take up to do chores from 1920 to 2019.

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