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diagram shows the amount of graduated university students in Canada

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The given diagram shows the amount of graduated university students in Canada between 1992 and 2007. There are two colors represented for females and males from 1992 to 2007 in the graph. Firstly, the number of graduated females, 100, 000 students, had been leading since 1992 and it was almost a twice of graduated males, 70, 000 students, in 1992. The rate of graduated females has been just about 100, 000 in 1992 and there was a slight increase around 105, 000 numbers until 1995. In the same period, both females and males increased and decreased in their levels respectively. After 1998, there was a moderate rise for graduated males rate up to 95, 000 numbers and a rocket climb in the number of graduates for females until around 148, 000 numbers in 2006. Over a period, the difference between females and males graduated rate was over 1. 5 times in the graph. In conclusion, although both the amount of university graduates for females and males have been upward trends until 2006, there was a small decline in 1998 in obvious.
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diagram
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the amount of
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university students in Canada between 1992 and 2007. There are two colors represented for
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females
and
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males
from 1992 to 2007 in the graph.

Firstly
, the
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of graduated
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females
, 100, 000 students, had been leading since 1992 and it was almost a twice of graduated
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males
, 70, 000 students, in 1992. The rate of graduated
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females
has been
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about 100, 000 in 1992 and there was a slight increase around 105, 000
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numbers
until 1995. In the same period, both
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females
and
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males
increased and decreased in their levels
respectively
. After 1998, there was a moderate rise for graduated
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males
rate up to 95, 000
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numbers
and a rocket climb in the
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of graduates for
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females
until around 148, 000
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numbers
in 2006. Over a period, the difference between
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females
and
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males
graduated rate was over 1. 5 times in the graph.

In conclusion
, although both the amount of university graduates for
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females
and
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males
have been upward trends until 2006, there was a
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small
decline in 1998 in obvious.
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IELTS academic diagram shows the amount of graduated university students in Canada

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