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The given diagram illustrates the process of producing sugar from sugar cane Overall, there are 7 steps to make sugar from sugar cane. First of all, sugar cane is grown in the agricultural field it takes twelve to eighteen months for the growth of sugar cane. Secondly, the grown sugar cane is harvested. there two methods to harvest the sugar cane by using agricultural machines (i. e. tractor, troly. ) and by using labor. If we compare both the procedures, the agricultural one is more efficient. It is a fast process and we can harvest a lot more area in less time as compared to the process in which we use labor. Next, sugar cane is squeezed by putting it in a machine and juice is collected. Afterwards, the collected juice is purified using a filter mostly limestone filter is used. Later the juice is poured in a huge container and heated until it becomes syrup. Subsequently, centrifugal process is used to separate sugar crystals from syrup. finally, in the last process separated sugar minerals are dried and cooled. in this way sugar is produced from sugar cane.
The
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diagram illustrates the
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process
of producing
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sugar
from
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sugar
cane

Overall
, there are 7 steps to
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make
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sugar
from
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sugar
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cane
.
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First of all
,
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sugar
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cane
is grown
in the agricultural field it takes twelve to eighteen months for the growth of
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sugar
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cane
.
Secondly
, the grown
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sugar
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cane
is harvested
.
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there
two methods to harvest the
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sugar
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cane
by using agricultural machines (
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i. e.
tractor,
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troly
.
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)
and by using labor. If we compare both the procedures, the agricultural one is more efficient. It is a
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fast
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process and
we can harvest a lot more area in less time as compared to the
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process
in which we
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use
labor.
Next
,
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sugar
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cane
is squeezed
by putting it in a machine and juice
is collected
. Afterwards, the collected juice
is purified
using a filter
mostly
limestone filter is
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used
. Later the juice
is poured
in a huge container and heated until it becomes syrup.
Subsequently
, centrifugal
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process
is
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used
to separate
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sugar
crystals from syrup.
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finally
, in the last
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separated
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sugar
minerals
are dried
and cooled.
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in
this way
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sugar
is produced
from
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