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Diagram below changes in park between the years 2004-2014.

Diagram below changes in park between the years 2004-2014. 30DRN

The given two diagrams illustrate the changes which took place over a decade from 2004-2014 in the district park. Overall, many new things were introduced over the decade and some were replaced. To commence with a new cycling path has been constructed along the parameters of the park. Moreover, entrance, tennis court and football ground is intact. Car park area has been enhanced now as, now there is a capacity of 50 cars at a time. Also, picnic area has been made at down corner of the park where one can spend some good hours. Furthermore, a new children softplay area has been built adjacent to children play area. Toilets also been installed near cafe which is newly established where you can enjoy different beverages. Moving further, a new boating area has been built in replacement of pond where you cam enjoy boating with family and friends.

The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
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 two diagrams illustrate the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 which took place over a decade from 2004-2014 in the district park.

Overall
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 things were introduced
 over the decade and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
were replaced
.

To commence with a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 cycling path has been constructed
 along the parameters of the park. Moreover
, entrance, tennis court and football ground is intact. Car park You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 has been enhanced
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 as, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 there is a capacity of 50 cars at a time. Also
, picnic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 has been made
 at down corner of the park where one can spend This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 hours.

Furthermore
, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "child"?child
children
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softplay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 has been built
 adjacent to children play You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
. Toilets also
been installed
 near 'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"café
cafe
 which is newly
 established where you can enjoy This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 beverages. Moving further
, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 boating You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 has been built
 in replacement of pond where you Did you mean "came" (past tense of 'to come')?came
cam
 enjoy boating with family and friends. 