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The bar graph demonstrates the number of people who did not work full-time in terms of Uk graduates and postgraduates in 2008. It is clear that further study had the most dominant of the number of learners over the period shown. Meanwhile the opposite trend can be seen when we look at voluntary work. As can be seen from the chart, further study from Uk graduates accounted for the largest students with approximately 30. 000 students, doubling that of both part-time work and unemployment. Whereas → HOWEVER, the destination → NUMBER of graduates pupils from voluntary work experienced only 3500 students, tenfold lower than of Further study. In comparison, the number of postgraduates pupils from part-time work and further study contributed over almost 2500 students which comprised almost the entire chart, sevenfold higher than of voluntary work. By contrast, the number of pupils from unemployment was almost 1600 students

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