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The diagram depicts a series of stages in the life

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The diagram depicts a series of stages in the life cycle of honey bees. In general, we can also noticeable that the process involves 5 main steps which begin with the female adult honey bee and finishes with a mature bee and it takes 35-36 days to complete the life cycle The circulatory system of a honey bee commences with the female adult bee, the bee would lay 1-2 eggs every day and it takes 9-10 days to make those eggs hatch and the immature form of bee or nymph will appear. Subsequently, about 5 days after hatches, the bee will take their first sheds away from the nymph for the first time. In the following stage, we can see there are 3 steps for the nymph to shed its skin and grow in size. The second time is 7 days after their first skin sheds and the last time as it grows is 9 days later. After a total of 30-31 days from the first start, the young adult bee emerges. Finally, there are 4 days for them to become mature. After all stages are complete, the lifecycle will then begin again
The diagram depicts a series of stages in the life cycle of honey bees.
In general
, we can
also
noticeable that the process involves 5 main steps which
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with the female adult honey bee and finishes with a mature bee and it takes 35-36 days to complete the life cycle

The circulatory system of a honey bee commences with the female adult bee, the bee would lay 1-2 eggs every day and it takes 9-10 days to
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those eggs hatch and the immature form of bee or nymph will appear.

Subsequently
, about 5 days after hatches, the bee will take their
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sheds away from the nymph for the
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time. In the following stage, we can
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there are 3 steps for the nymph to shed its skin and grow in size. The second time is 7 days after their
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skin sheds and the last time as it grows is 9 days later. After a total of 30-31 days from the
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, the young adult bee emerges.
Finally
, there are 4 days for them to become mature.
After all
stages are complete, the lifecycle will then
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