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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the level of participating in education system technology in producing and civilized nations in 1980 and 1990. Overall, it can be seen the highest percentage of all people participating in schooling and Science was in economically developed countries, why developing Nations accounted for the longest proportion. Furthermore, a significant increase in the proportion of industrialised nations over the. period given. The percentage of average years of schooling and developed countries started at just over three years in 1980. This figure then rose to reach of almost four years in 1990. In terms of industrialized nations which had by far the highest proportion in every Breadth 8 years in 1980 and 110 in 1990. from this point, and technicians climbed to peat at generally 40000 and 70000 in 1980 and 1990 consistently, in the figure for us was evident reaching 110 billion in 1980 and 330 billions in the final year. However, underdeveloped countries had spent on research around about 2 billion in 1990 by 10, 000 scientists and technicians
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of the level of participating in education system technology in producing and civilized
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in 1980 and 1990.

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the highest percentage of all
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participating in schooling and Science was in
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developed countries
, why developing
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accounted for the longest
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of
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developed countries
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over three years in 1980. This figure then rose to reach of almost four years in 1990. In terms of
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industrialized
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which had by far the highest
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in every Breadth 8 years in 1980 and 110 in 1990.
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from
this point, and technicians climbed to peat at
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40000 and 70000 in 1980 and 1990
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, in the figure for us was evident reaching 110 billion in 1980 and 330 billions in the final
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, underdeveloped countries had spent on research around about 2 billion in 1990 by 10, 000 scientists and technicians
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6.0
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