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Consumption of Vegetables and Fish

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The bar chart above illustrate about the intake of five portion of fruits and vegetable each day by men, women and children of UK in 8 years from 2001 to 2008. overall, there is consistent rise in the preference of fruit and vegetables made by women however, there is slightly fluctuation in the choice of fruit and vegetable by men and children over the given period of time. In the year 2006, nearly 30% of extreme preference were made towards five portion of fruits and vegetables. Meanwhile, man and children could only increase their intake in 2007 and 2008 respectively. it is also clear enough to see that for about 20% to 30% children made a relatively least intake of food compared to men and women but in 2013 men almost reached to the level of preference made by women which was the difference of nearly 3%. So, men made the average choice over the consumption of fruits and vegetables however, women and children made highest and lowest preferences respectively.
The bar chart above illustrate about the intake of five portion of
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each day by
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men
,
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women
and
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children
of UK in 8 years from 2001 to 2008.
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overall
, there is consistent rise in the
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preference
of
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fruit
and
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vegetables
made by
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women
however
, there is
slightly
fluctuation in the choice of
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fruit
and
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vegetable
by
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men
and
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children
over the
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period of time. In the year 2006,
nearly
30% of extreme
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preference
were made
towards five portion of
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fruits
and
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vegetables
. Meanwhile,
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man
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children
could
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increase their intake in 2007 and 2008
respectively
.
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that for about 20% to 30%
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children
made a
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least
intake of food compared to
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and
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women
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in 2013
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men
almost reached to the level of
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preference
made by
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women
which was the difference of
nearly
3%.
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,
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men
made the average choice over the consumption of
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and
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vegetables
however
,
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women
and
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children
made highest and lowest
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preferences
respectively
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IELTS academic Consumption of Vegetables and Fish

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
170 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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