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The diagram shows two processes of how sea life, fish, plants and animals are killed by gas and liquid pollution. Overall it can be seen that there are 2 main stages starting with factories releasing gas pollution in the air or pumping liquid pollution in the rivers, and it ends with pollution killing sea life and fish First Factories produce gas pollution and liquid pollution, Then Gas pollution rises into the air which is then stored in clouds and falls as acid rain. This acid rain can damage plants and animals in the countryside. Alternatively Liquid pollution is also pumped into nearby rivers by factories. Finally the harmful chemicals are carried to the sea by rivers and as a result sea life and fish are killed by polluted water.

The diagram This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 two processes of how You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 life, fish, plants and animals are killed
 by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvaporsmoke
gas
 and liquid pollution.

Overall
 it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that there are 2 main stages starting with factories releasing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvaporsmoke
gas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
 in the air or pumping liquid You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
 in the rivers, and it ends with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
 killing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 life and fish

First
 Factories produce You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvaporsmoke
gas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
 and liquid You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
, Then You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvaporsmoke
Gas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
 rises into the air which is then stored in clouds and falls as acid rain. This acid rain can damage plants and animals in the countryside.

Alternatively
 Liquid You use this word too often, consider replacing it withabuseinfectioncorruptiondeterioration
pollution
 is also
 pumped into nearby rivers by factories. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Finally,
Finally
 the harmful chemicals are carried
 to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 by rivers and as a result
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 life and fish are killed
 by polluted water. 