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Comparison pf energy production

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The two pie charts provide the information about how the proportion of various types of energy production in France changed in the years 1995 and 2005. Overall, the trend is that the proportion of coal and gas of France in both years made up more than half of energy generation, while there was relatively less proportion of nuclear and other sources of energy. In terms of the most significant feature of the two charts, the energy generated from coal accounted for 29. 80% of total power at the beginning of the period, experiencing a very slight increase of about 1% in 2005. Similarly, energy outputs from gas, which comprised 29. 63% of total energy production in 1995, rose marginally to 30. 1% after 10 years period. In regard to the remaining modes of producing energy, there was a rough 5% growth in the production from nuclear power and the use of other energy sources, rising from 6. 40% to 10. 10% and from 4. 90% to 9. 10%, respectively. Petroleum, on the other hand, fell considerably to just under one-fifth of total by 2005 although it was used as the same amount as oil and gas in 1995 (29. 27%).
The two pie charts provide the information about how the proportion of various types of
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production in France
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changed
in the years 1995 and 2005.

Overall
, the trend is that the proportion of coal and gas of France in both years made up more than half of
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generation, while there was
relatively
less proportion of nuclear and other sources of energy.

In terms of the most significant feature of the two charts, the
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generated from coal accounted for 29. 80% of total power at the beginning of the period, experiencing a
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slight increase of about 1% in 2005.
Similarly
,
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outputs from gas, which comprised 29. 63% of total
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production in 1995, rose
marginally
to 30. 1% after 10 years period.

In regard to the remaining modes of producing
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, there was a rough 5% growth in the production from nuclear power and the
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use
of other
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sources, rising from 6. 40% to 10. 10% and from 4. 90% to 9. 10%,
respectively
. Petroleum,
on the other hand
, fell
considerably
to
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under one-fifth of total by 2005 although it was
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as the same amount as oil and gas in 1995 (29. 27%).
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