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Proportion of GDP in the UK

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The bar graph indicates the proportion of the gross domestic product produced from the IT industry and Service sectors in the UK between 1992 and 2000, and it is measured in percentages. Overall, it is apparent to me that both industries increased though IT surpassed service industry and reached its highest point over 14% by 2000 in the given period as the whole. According to the graph, in 1992, the service industry started off with 4% of GDP, while IT accounted for over 6 %, overtaking the former one throughout of the given period. Over the next four years, the service industry grew gradually to reach around 7%, whereas the downward trend occurred in the IT industry, falling from over 8% to just below 8% mildly. In contrast, over the following four years, the trends of the both components increased but they were noticeably different. The percentage of GDP from IT jumped sharply to 12% by 1996 and nearly 15 % by 2000, whereas the service sector remained nearly the same, growing to only 8 percent.
The bar graph indicates the proportion of the gross domestic product produced from the IT
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industry
and
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Service
sectors in the UK between 1992 and 2000, and it
is measured
in percentages.

Overall
, it is apparent to me that both
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industries
increased though IT surpassed
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service
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industry
and reached its highest point
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over
14% by 2000 in the
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given
period as the whole.

According to the graph, in 1992, the
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service
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industry
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started
off with 4% of GDP, while IT accounted for
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over
6 %, overtaking the former one throughout of the
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given
period.
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Over
the
next
four years, the
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service
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industry
grew
gradually
to reach around 7%, whereas the downward trend occurred in the IT
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industry
, falling from
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over
8% to
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just
below 8%
mildly
.

In contrast
,
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over
the following four years, the trends of the both components increased
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they were
noticeably
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different
. The percentage of GDP from IT jumped
sharply
to 12% by 1996 and
nearly
15 % by 2000, whereas the
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service
sector remained
nearly
the same, growing to
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only
8 percent.
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IELTS academic Proportion of GDP in the UK

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