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number of girls enrolled for 100 boys in different levels of education

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The bar graph lists the the enrolment of girls to every 100 boys in education, secondary, teritiary levels of education over in developed and developing countries. The statics of the developed nations are significantly higher when compared to that of developing countries and slightly increasing with the level of education during the period of time between 1990 and 1998. The teritiary education accounts for the highest (105 and 112) and contradicting lowest (66, 75) in the both years in develped and developing countries respectively. While both primary and secondary education in affluent nations tried to reach the target level with slight differences of 1 or 2 in secondary and 4 or 5 in primary in both years, the developing countries stayed behind in primary with 83 and 87 in 1990 and 1998. The secondary education accounts for the least number of girls enrolled in developing countries with way 72 and 82 in the both years.
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enrolment
of girls to every 100 boys in
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education
,
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secondary
,
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teritiary
levels of
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education
over in developed and
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developing
countries.

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significantly
higher when compared to that of
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developing
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countries
and
slightly
increasing with the level of
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education
during the period of time between 1990 and 1998.

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The
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teritiary
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education
accounts for the highest (105 and 112) and contradicting lowest (66, 75) in the both years in
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develped
and
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developing
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countries
respectively
.

While both primary and
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secondary
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education
in affluent nations tried to reach the target level with slight differences of 1 or 2 in
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secondary
and 4 or 5 in primary in both years, the
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developing
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countries
stayed behind in primary with 83 and 87 in 1990 and 1998.

The
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secondary
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education
accounts for the least number of girls enrolled in
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developing
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countries
with way 72 and 82 in the both years.
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IELTS academic number of girls enrolled for 100 boys in different levels of education

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5.5
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