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The given two bar graphs describe the information about the changes in maximnum number of Asian elephants in 1994 and 2007. Looking at the graph, the population of Asian elephants in India was the highest both in two years representing around 10000 in 1399 and around ฯ000 to 8ooo in 2004. Moving to Laos, the number were remain stable at under 2000. In the same way Vietnam was remain stable at under 2000 too. In addition to Malaysin, the gap between two years were very different, the number were decreased. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that the number was increased from 1997 to 2004. The gap between two years were different in individual country.
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number of Asian elephants in 1994 and 2007.

Looking at the graph, the population of Asian elephants in India was the highest

both in two years representing around 10000 in 1399 and around ฯ000 to 8ooo in 2004.

Moving to Laos, the number
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were
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remain
stable at under 2000. In the same

way Vietnam was
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remain
stable at under 2000 too.
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Malaysin
, the gap

between two years were
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different
, the number
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Overall
, it can be
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seen
from the graph that the number
was increased


from 1997 to 2004. The gap between two years were
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different
in individual country.

IELTS academic comparing about elephant population

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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