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The given line graphs provides the information about the percentage of households with electrical appliances and total amount of time in housework during a week by a household in a particular country throughout a period of 99 years. Overall from the graphs it is clear that, the percentage of changes in households. with equipments shows a rising trend, while the other illustrates an opposite trend. In 1920, electrical appliances were not a common usage in houses as washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner accounted for 40%, 1% and 30% respectively. After 20 years, all these machines were used above half of the population. Although these were common in the next 40 years, there has been a change in the usage of each. While Refrigerator showed a high demand during the succeeding years to reach the use from 70% in 1960 to 100% in 2017, washing equipment showed fluctuations after 60 years at almost 62% and then showed a gradual increase at almost 80% during the end of the year. Vacuum cleaner, however, showed a steady increase from 30% to 100% throughout these years. On the other hand, house worls such as washing clothes, cooking and cleaning were initially done by the households since the limited supply of machineries. As technology developed, man work was carried out by machines which can be clearly seen at 50% in 1920 which drastically lowered to 20% in 1960 followed by a gradually decrease reaching at 10% in 2019.
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households
with electrical appliances and total amount of time in housework during a week by a
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household
in a particular country throughout a period of 99 years.

Overall
from the graphs it is
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clear
that, the percentage of
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changes
in
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households
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with
equipments
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a rising trend, while the other illustrates an opposite trend.

In 1920, electrical appliances were not a common usage in
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houses
as washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner accounted for 40%, 1% and 30%
respectively
. After 20 years, all these machines were
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used
above half of the population. Although these were common in the
next
40 years, there has been a
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change
in the usage of each. While Refrigerator
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showed
a high demand during the succeeding years to reach the
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use
from 70% in 1960 to 100% in 2017, washing equipment
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showed
fluctuations after 60 years at almost 62% and then
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showed
a gradual increase at almost 80% during the
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end
of the
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year
. Vacuum cleaner,
however
,
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showed
a steady increase from 30% to 100% throughout these years.

On the other hand
,
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worls
such as washing clothes, cooking and cleaning were
initially
done by the
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households
since the limited supply of
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machineries
. As technology developed,
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man
work
was carried
out by machines which can be
clearly
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seen
at 50% in 1920 which
drastically
lowered to 20% in 1960 followed by a
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gradually decrease
reaching at 10% in 2019.
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IELTS academic given line graphs provides the information. about the percentage of households with electrical

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