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British people donation to the charities

British people donation to the charities 1AbbG

The bar graph provides us with some information about the amount of money English people gave to non - profits spanning across different age groups as well as the comparison between the two years which are 1990 and 2010. Overall, the donation by the people in British people, the age band of the group who contributed the least were between 18 to 25 year old’s in the year 2010 whereas, during 1990, the same age group donated slightly above 15% of the money to the charities. While, a big portion of people from England, who are between 36 to 50 and 51 to 65, contributed around more than 40% in the year 1990 and slightly lower than 40 % in 2010 respectively. The contribution on the other hand, specifically by the people who were in their 36s and 50s, was equal in the year 2010. To conclude, the data which is provided to us is about the positive trend which demonstrates the importance of charities and how the people in 1990 were more shelling out to the charities compare to the ones in 2010.

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