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This line graph gives the information about the number of people who visited three different hotels such as Palace hotel, Taja hotel and Hotel Queen last week in delhi. We can see from the chart that most people visited the hotel on sunday in delhi. On Monday highest number of visitors at Palace hotel which was about 300. And on sunday number of visitors almost doubled which was about 650. Moreover, lowest number of people in Taja hotel were 200 which is on Wednesday and on Sunday there were about 450 customers. And for Hotel Queen we can say that there were not that much customers compare to other two hotels. there was 150-300 customers vsited in last week. In conclusion, we can say that hotels were more busier on weekends compare to weekdays in last week in Delhi.
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Queen last week in
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of visitors at Palace
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of visitors almost doubled which was about 650.

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were 200 which is on Wednesday and on Sunday there were about 450 customers.

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Queen we can say that there were not that
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