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Two maps above illustrate the changes of the way to go to the City Hospital in the year of 2007 and 2010. Over the 3 years, the area has witnessed big changes. As we can see, there are two new roundabouts in front of the city hospital and beside the city road. In 2007, there were many bus stops around Hospital Rd street. Whereas, in 2010 there are no bus stops around Hospital Rd street and in it replaced with staff car park in the east and bus station in the west of Hospital Rd street. Furthermore, in 2007 the public and staff car placed in one area, which is next to City Hospital. However, in 2010 there are two parking places, for staff and for public is separated. The City Hospital still stands in the same place and has not been modified in the years since. Also, Ring Road and City Road still stay in the same position since 2007.
Two maps above illustrate the
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in the year of 2007 and 2010.

Over the 3 years, the area has witnessed
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. As we can
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, there are two new roundabouts in front of the city
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hospital
and beside the city road. In 2007, there were
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Rd street. Whereas, in 2010 there are no
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Rd street and in it replaced with staff car park in the east and bus station in the west of
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Rd street.
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, in 2007 the public and staff car placed in one area, which is
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to City
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, in 2010 there are two parking places, for staff and for public
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. The City
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still
stands in the same place and has not
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in the years since.
Also
, Ring Road and City Road
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stay in the same position since 2007.
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