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Chart 1 below shows the normal price of a tablet computer in different stores (in US dollars), and the % discount offered by these stores when the products are sold on promotion. Chart 2 shows the % increase in volume sales when the discount promotions are happening, and Chart 3 shows funds (in 000 US dollars) spent on TV advertising during these promotions. Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The line graph illustrates how many passengers used different vehicle modes between1952-2002 in Great Britain. Overall, the number of car passengers had been dramatically increasing, meanwhile people who tend to travel by buses and coaches slightly dropped. As for the railway passengers, they had remained the same over the time period. Firstly, the disparity between passengers of car and buses, coaches was a little in 1952 (about 50 billion people), however over the time people who preferred car were increased. Furthermore it seems that the highest point for latter category is approximately 650 billion people in 2002. As for the busses and coaches, usage of this transport mode was slipped to the around 50 billion people, which became equal with railway passengers in that year. But it needs to be mentioned that latter transport type has a figure which had not been changed by 2002 and accounted for roughly the same amount of people over the period.
The line graph illustrates how
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passengers
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different
vehicle modes between1952-2002 in Great Britain.

Overall
, the number of car
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passengers
had been
dramatically
increasing, meanwhile
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people
who tend to travel by buses and coaches
slightly
dropped. As for the railway
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passengers
, they had remained the same over the time period.

Firstly
, the disparity between
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passengers
of car and buses, coaches was a
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little
in 1952 (about 50 billion
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people)
,
however
over the time
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people
who preferred car
were increased
.
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Furthermore
it seems that the highest point for latter category is approximately 650 billion
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people
in 2002.

As for the busses and coaches, usage of this transport mode
was slipped
to the around 50 billion
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people
, which became equal with railway
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passengers
in that year.
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But
it needs to
be mentioned
that latter transport type has a figure which had not been
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changed
by 2002 and accounted for roughly the same amount of
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people
over the period.
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IELTS academic Chart 1 below shows the normal price of a tablet computer in different stores (in US dollars), and the % discount offered by these stores when the products are sold on promotion. Chart 2 shows the % increase in volume sales when the discount promotions are happening, and Chart 3 shows funds (in 000 US dollars) spent on TV advertising during these promotions. Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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