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The bar chart shows the difference between the percentage of females and males in different post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.

The bar chart shows the difference between the percentage of females and males in different post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999. Overall, women had the leading share in two qualifications, while men came first in three. The highest percentage for women and men were reported in undergraduate diploma and skilled vocational diploma respectively. There was a huge difference between proportions of males in females in skilled vocational diploma respectively, with the former standing first with 90%. The disparity between the two figures was almost the same in undergraduate diploma and postgraduate diploma. However, while in former women had the highest share with 70%, men accounted for the largest percentage in the latter with 70%. Women also became first in bachelor’s degree; whereas the share of men was lower by small gap (55% and 45% respectively). In contrast, in master’s degree the distribution of females was 2/3 as high as that of males, as the males was responsible for the share with 60%
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post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.

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women
had the leading
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in two qualifications, while
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came
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women
and
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were reported
in undergraduate
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diploma
and skilled vocational
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diploma
respectively
.

There was a huge difference between proportions of
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males
in females in skilled vocational
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diploma
respectively
, with the former standing
first
with 90%.

The disparity between the two figures was almost the same in undergraduate
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diploma
and postgraduate
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diploma
.
However
, while in former
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women
had the highest
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share
with 70%,
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men
accounted for the largest percentage in the latter with
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70%. Women
also
became
first
in bachelor’s degree; whereas the
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share
of
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men
was lower by
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small
gap (55% and 45%
respectively
).
In contrast
, in master’s degree the distribution of females was 2/3 as high as that of
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males
, as the
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was responsible for the
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share
with 60%
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the difference between the percentage of females and males in different post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.

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