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CHANGES IN SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY MUSEUM

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The maps illustrate the developments of science and technology Museum from 1996 to 2016. Overall, during the period, the museum was completely modernized and saw spectacular changes. Firstly, the path in the south had been planted with trees by 2016, although, some of them at the northern west side of the field had been cut, instead replaced with solar wind area also at the west a specific parking spot had been allocated to bicycles from car park but rest remained the same. The most noticeable changes however took place in the building. Indeed, the reception in the south part had extended and the café converted to restaurant. The writing desks also in the eastnorth modernized in order to use computers. In addition to this, VR room at eastnorth and 3D-cinema next to the digital technology room (which was a replacement of print room) had been built by 2016. Moreover, the diesel engine exhibition had been renovated to electric car exhibition. In conclusion, the science and technology Museum had saw notable changes in buildings and slight developments in the yard.
The maps illustrate the developments of science and technology Museum from

1996 to 2016.
Overall
, during the period, the museum was completely

modernized and
saw
spectacular
changes
.

Firstly
, the path in the south had
been planted
with trees by 2016, although,
some


of them at the northern west side of the field had been
cut
,
instead
replaced with

solar wind area
also
at the west a specific parking spot had
been allocated
to

bicycles from car park
but
rest remained the same. The most noticeable
changes


however
took place in the building.
Indeed
, the reception in the south part had

extended and the café converted to restaurant. The writing desks
also
in the
eastnorth
modernized in order to
use
computers.
In addition
to this, VR room at
eastnorth
and 3D-cinema
next
to the digital technology room (which was a

replacement of print room) had
been built
by 2016.
Moreover
, the diesel engine

exhibition had
been renovated
to electric car exhibition.

In conclusion
, the science and technology Museum had
saw
notable
changes
in

buildings and slight developments in the yard.
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