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Cambridge ielts number 9, test 2, writing task number 1

Cambridge ielts number 9, test 2, writing task number 1 rKQWn
The chart present the usage of different types of calls from 1995 until 2002 8n UK. During this period the number of calls with mobiles increased. Due to obtain of utilisation of mobile between 1995 and 2002. But obtained of mobiles never got close to the level of local calls made by fixed lines. As the chart is showing, local calls that were made by fixed lines were more popular. This type of calls increased 1995 and 1999. However it decreased from 1999 until 2002. National and international calls by fixed lines were also increasing from 1995 to 2001. It shows that communication between countries was getting much easier and possible. Yet the usage of this type of calls didn't increase anymore after that. Overall, from 1995 to 2002 many people still prefer to communicate through fixed lines. However, it is obvious that by increasing the usage of mobile phones more calls were made by this type.
The chart present the usage of
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types
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calls
from 1995 until 2002 8n UK. During this period the number of
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calls
with mobiles increased. Due to obtain of
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utilisation
of mobile between 1995 and 2002.
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obtained of mobiles never
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got
close to the level of local
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calls
made by
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fixed
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lines
. As the chart is showing, local
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calls
that
were made
by
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fixed
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lines
were more popular. This
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type
of
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calls
increased 1995 and 1999.
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However
it decreased from 1999 until 2002. National and international
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calls
by
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fixed
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lines
were
also
increasing from 1995 to 2001. It
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shows
that communication between countries was getting much easier and possible.
Yet
the usage of this
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type
of
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calls
didn't increase anymore after that.
Overall
, from 1995 to 2002
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many
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people
still
prefer to communicate through
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fixed
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lines
.
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, it is obvious that by increasing the usage of mobile phones more
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calls
were made
by this
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type
.
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IELTS academic Cambridge ielts number 9, test 2, writing task number 1

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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