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The diagram shows the recycling process of paper

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The given chart demonstrates the process of the waste paper recycling. Overall, there are six stages starting with collecting paper and ending with manufacturing new usable paper. First of all, it is clearly seen that public paper banks and papers from business are gathered in order to sorting them by hand, and here they are graded. Next unused paper will be got rid of, as well. Then before cleaning paper mill. After being pulped and charged from staples, for example, and paper is uncolored. Finally, this semi-ready paper come to the last process which manufactures handful paper.
The
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given
chart demonstrates the process of the waste paper recycling.

Overall
, there are six stages starting with collecting paper and ending with manufacturing new usable paper.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is
clearly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that public paper banks and papers from business
are gathered
in order to
Did you mean "sort"?
sorting
them by hand, and here they
are graded
.
Next
unused paper will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
rid of,
as well
.

Then
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
cleaning paper mill. After
being pulped
and charged from staples,
for example
, and paper
is uncolored
.
Finally
, this semi-ready paper
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the last process which manufactures handful paper.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the recycling process of paper

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4 paragraphs
97 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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