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C) The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart depicts the difference between the year 2009 and 2019 with respect to the devices which were used to watch television by the individuals ranging from age group 18 to 25 in Canada. Overall, the Conventional TV was the most popular device in 2009, its usage decreased and it was the least significant part of the pie chart in 2019, similarly, Tablets and Mobile Phones were the most used devices in 2019. Firstly, in 2009 the conventional TV was the largest part in the pie chart contributing around 34 percent but its usage declined drastically to a mere 4% in by the year 2019. Accordingly, laptops and desktop computers which contributed to be a significant device for watching television in 2009 also saw their percentage decrease to 12% respectively. On the contrary, Flat TV screens and Tablets became the highest contributors in 2019 as its ratio increased to thrice of what it was in 2009, whilst, the popularity of Mobile phones rose upto 26 percent in 2019.
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television by the individuals ranging from age group 18 to 25 in Canada.

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in 2009, its usage
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in 2019.

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its usage declined
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their percentage decrease to 12%
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IELTS academic C) The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

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