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Bullying is a big problem in many school. What do you thing are the cause of this? What solution can you suggest? Give reason for your answer with relevant example

Bullying is a big problem in many school. What do you thing are the cause of this? What solution can you suggest? Give reason for your answer with relevant example 0w1NG

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