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the changes of average monthly salary and prices of black and white, and color TV

the changes of average monthly salary and prices of black and white, and color TV GLeLx

The chart compares people's earnings in Japan with the prices of two types of television between 1953 to 1973, a twenty-year period. On the whole, we can observe a rising trend in monthly salary and a gradual decline in TV prices. Back in 1953, a black and white TV, which was possibly the only type available on the market, cost approximately 100 thousand yen. It was the highest point as the price continually decreased throughout the time frame. Colour TV, on the other hand, made its appearance in the late 1950s, when people would spend as much as 180 thousand yen to purchase it. However, the price sharply declined until it reached a little more than 100 thousand yen in 1963, followed by a moderate diminution finishing at around 80 thousand yen in 1973. At the same time, the chart portrays a steady growth of income in Japan. In 1953, Japanese people earned about 30 thousand yen on average. The figure gradually increased in the next five years and then started to rise more rapidly from 1958 to 1968. The biggest surge in monthly salary can be seen from 1968 to 1973, with the number culminating at 180 thousand yen. Noticeably, the salary overtook the price of the colour TV in around 1966, which means people could afford it with what they earned in a month.

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