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The bar chart illustrates the global sales of popular mobile brands.

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The bar chart illustrates the global sales of popular mobile brands. It is divided into brands- Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG and ZTE, and in three periods 2009, 2011 and 2013. Overall, the number of mobile sales of Samsung, Apple, ZTE shows an upward trend, whereas Nokia and Lg are in a downward trend. The highest peak of the number of sales is Samsung in 2013 and the bottom is Apple in 2009. In 2009, Samsung was around 225 and increased significantly in 2011 and 2013, with 300 and 450 respectively. In contrast, Nokia witnessed an opposite trend, in 2009 and 2011, with approximately 450 and 400, dramatically dropping to 250 in 2013. However, Nokia is still higher than other trends, except Samsung. Although the number of sales in Apple rose significantly in 2013 that of 2009, with 150 opposed to 25, the sales number of Samsung is three or four times more that of Apple. Similar to ZTE and LG, they both have almost the same sales as Apple. Some variance is LG was dropping and ZTE was rising slightly.
The bar chart illustrates the global
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of popular mobile brands. It
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Apple
, Nokia, LG and
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ZTE
, and in three periods 2009, 2011 and 2013.

Overall
, the
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of mobile
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of Samsung,
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Apple
,
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ZTE
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an upward
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, whereas Nokia and Lg are in a downward
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. The highest peak of the
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number
of
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sales
is Samsung in 2013 and the bottom is
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Apple
in 2009.

In 2009, Samsung was around 225 and increased
significantly
in 2011 and 2013, with 300 and 450
respectively
.
In contrast
, Nokia witnessed an opposite
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trend
, in 2009 and 2011, with approximately 450 and 400,
dramatically
dropping to 250 in 2013.
However
, Nokia is
still
higher than other
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trends
, except Samsung.

Although the
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number
of
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sales
in
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Apple
rose
significantly
in 2013 that of 2009, with 150 opposed to 25, the
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sales
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of Samsung is three or four times more that of
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Apple
. Similar to
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ZTE
and LG, they both have almost the same
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as
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Apple
.
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variance is LG was dropping and
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ZTE
was rising
slightly
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