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British people giving money to charity

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This bar graph shows information about the percentage of british people giving money to charity by an age range in the years 1990 and 2010. In the chart you can see that it is divided by certain ages of 18-25, 26-35, 36-50, 51-65 and <65. In 1990 the percentage of young people that is between 18 years and 50 years, was bigger than the percentage of young people in 2010, that means the economy in 1990 for young people was more abundant and more stable. The ones that have 18-25 years duplicate the percentage of giving money to charity in 1990. In 2010 the old people that are between 51 years and more than 65 years raised their percentages which show us that the economy got better for people over 50 years. Those who donated the most money to charity were those aged 36-50 years old in 1990. In conclusion, young adults account for the highest percentages in 1990 and old adults give more donations in 2010.
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giving money to charity by an age range in the years 1990 and 2010.

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in 2010, that means the economy in 1990 for
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was more abundant and more stable. The ones that have 18-25 years duplicate the
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of giving money to charity in 1990. In 2010 the
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old
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that are between 51 years and more than 65 years raised their
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over 50 years. Those who donated the most money to charity were those aged 36-50 years
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in 1990.
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adults give more donations in 2010.
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IELTS academic British people giving money to charity

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  American English
2 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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