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The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents.

The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents. 0n6YG
Two maps depict the system of the crossed roads nowadays and the prediction of differences that will help down crease the numbers of accidents. Overall, the road map will be changed sufficiently with the main addition of round-circle movement in the centre, traffic lights in the school area and every pathway will become straight without any corners that will reduce the number of dangerous cases on the road. According to the first map, the main accidents usually happen on the road crossings, which are planned to be changed with several additions. The main change is the construction of the round boat on the crossline of City Road and Forest Road that will help to stabilize and organise movement on the roads. Changing the road from the supermarket by demolition from one part of the road and by adding to this round movement also will decrease the number of car accidents and will help drivers to reach the store faster. Additionally, there will be traffic lights near the school on each side of the intersection to make the way home safer for children. One of the most noticeable trends is making roads straight, destroying dangerous places on each pathway for more comfortable driving and visibility.
Two maps depict the system of the crossed
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roads
nowadays and the prediction of differences that will
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help
down crease the numbers of accidents.

Overall
, the
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road
map will be
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changed
sufficiently
with the main addition of round-circle movement in the
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centre
, traffic lights in the school area and every pathway will become straight without any corners that will
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reduce
the number of
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dangerous
cases on the road.

According to the
first
map, the main accidents
usually
happen on the
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road
crossings, which
are planned
to be
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changed
with several additions. The main
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change
is the construction of the round boat on the
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crossline
of City
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Road
and Forest
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Road
that will
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help
to stabilize and
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organise
movement on the
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roads
. Changing the
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road
from the supermarket by demolition from one part of the
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road
and by adding to this round movement
also
will decrease the number of car accidents and will
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help
drivers to reach the store faster.

Additionally
, there will be traffic lights near the school on each side of the intersection to
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make
the way home safer for children. One of the most noticeable trends is making
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roads
straight, destroying
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dangerous
places on each pathway for more comfortable driving and visibility.
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IELTS academic The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents.

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