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Being a parent in the society

Being a parent in today's turbulent society presupposes both a hefty measure of patience and wisdom on the part of the parents. Steering their children through the maze of life and teaching them the skills they will need in order to survive is an endeavor in itself, which is all the more reason why parents' involvement in the home and in their children's education is of the utmost importance. Firstly, being a good parent entails considerable effort at home. Parents who either stay at home during the day or return home after work have an equal responsibility in making sure that they spend as much time as possible with their children. The result of this can only be a positive one, as children learn the value of family, self-sacrifice and love from a parent who spends quality time with his or her children after a grueling day at the office. A second responsibility a parent has at home is discipline. Most parents today ignore this determining factor in a child's development. Without discipline, children will never be able to brace themselves for the difficult job market ahead or learn to overcome difficulties solely relying on their own abilities. Parents must lay ground rules for every aspect of home life, be it table manners to how children are expected to discuss issues with their parents. Teaching children that rules exist in the microcosm of a house prepares youngsters for the more intricate conventions of social life. Secondly, parents should be very involved in their children's education and their responsibilities lie in some stages. Parents must not only highlight the importance of a good education by encouraging their children and supporting them even when they make mistakes, but also must help teach them proper study habits. Eventually, children grow up and it is during this next stage that parents must again step in to do what they are responsible for, and that is undergraduate studies. Parents should decide cautiously as to what their child could study and where their talents would best be molded. Choosing a field of studies or university that is far beyond the capabilities of their child would ultimately lead to an early dropout and subsequent unemployment. It is therefore evident that parents have a difficult job of raising their children. The qualities they need to become successful parents require care both at home and in their children's education. Parents who want to see their children grow up to lead satisfying lives should spend time with their children for both work and play, carefully plan out their education and lay down the rules so that children may understand if not appreciate social etiquette and conventions. Only in this way can they become actively involved in society.
Being a
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parent
in
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today
's turbulent society presupposes both a hefty measure of patience and wisdom on the part of the
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parents
. Steering their
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children
through the maze of life and teaching them the
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skills
they will need in order to survive is an endeavor in itself, which is all the more reason why parents' involvement in the home and in their children's
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education
is of the utmost importance.

Firstly
, being a
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good
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parent
entails considerable effort at home.
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Parents
who either stay at home during the day or return home after work have an equal responsibility in making sure that they spend as much time as possible with their
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children
. The result of this can
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only
be a
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positive
one, as
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children
learn the value of family, self-sacrifice and
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love
from a
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parent
who spends quality time with
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his or her
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children
after a grueling day at the office. A second responsibility a
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parent
has at home is discipline. Most
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parents
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today
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ignore
this determining factor in a child's development. Without discipline,
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children
will never be able to brace themselves for the difficult job market ahead or learn to overcome difficulties
solely
relying on their
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own
abilities.
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Parents
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must
lay ground
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rules
for every aspect of home life, be it table manners to how
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children
are
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expected
to discuss issues with their
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parents
. Teaching
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children
that
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rules
exist in the microcosm of a
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house
prepares youngsters for the more intricate conventions of social life.

Secondly
,
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parents
should be
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very
involved in their children's
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education
and their responsibilities lie in
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some
stages.
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must
not
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only
highlight the importance of a
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good
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education
by encouraging their
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children
and supporting them even when they
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make
mistakes,
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but
also
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must
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help
teach them proper
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study
habits.
Eventually
,
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children
grow
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up and
it is during this
next
stage that
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parents
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must
again step in to do what they are responsible for, and
that is
undergraduate
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studies
.
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Parents
should decide
cautiously
as to what their child could
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study
and where their talents would best
be molded
. Choosing a field of
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studies
or university
that is
far beyond the capabilities of their child would
ultimately
lead to an early dropout and subsequent unemployment.

It is
therefore
evident that
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parents
have a difficult job of raising their
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children
. The qualities they need to become successful
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parents
require care both at home and in their children's
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education
.
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Parents
who want to
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see
their
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children
grow up to lead satisfying
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lives
should spend time with their
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children
for both work and play,
carefully
plan out their
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education
and lay down the
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rules
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so
that
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children
may understand if not appreciate social etiquette and conventions.
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Only
in this way can they become
actively
involved in society.
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IELTS academic Being a parent in the society

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
457 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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