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Australian regular sport according to gender in 2010

Australian regular sport according to gender in 2010 nNxOE

Australian's regular sports, in terms of percentage, is given in the bar chart according to gender in 2010. It is obvious that women in all age-bracket had more consistent exercises than men, as percentage, except for the youngest range. Although, proportional difference between two genders was not substantial considering any particular age range. The peak proportional gap occurred for the third cohort (35 to 44), that was approximately 15%. So females at this age were most likely to allocate exercise in daily schedule compare to mail peers. Above this age range, gender's proportion divergence reduced gradually for all upcoming age groups. For elderly people, however, nearly the same proportion had physical practice habits. Men were leading only in the youngest group by 5 per cent, while, a marked turning occurred considering the adjacent age group, where women's ratio remained almost unchanged, but men's proportion fell significantly more than 10 per cent. In conclusion, aged Australian men and women were proportionally the same in terms of physical practice habits. Middle aged Australian females were more likely to have practice habits than male contemporaries. In contrast, young Australian men (15 to 25 years old) were having more orderly sport and exercise.

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 in the youngest group by 5 per cent, while, a marked turning occurred considering the adjacent You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyouthmaturitylifeold age
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 group, where women's ratio remained almost unchanged, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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 and women were proportionally
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, young Australian This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
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) were having more orderly sport and exercise. 