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The two maps show the expansion of a shopping mall to the southside.

The two maps show the expansion of a shopping mall to the southside. KG3DM
The two maps show the expansion of a shopping mall to the southside from its original infrastructure and additional changes that are planned along with it. Overall, The plan is to totally extend the Mall to the golf course and park in order to allow for new stores and eateries and in addition to that the car park is also expanded. Firstly, the shopping mall consists of a Children play area, Noodle shops, Cinemas, Cafe and supermarket along with toilet facilities and a departmental store. There is a golf course and a park is present in the east of the Shopping centre and a car park and Fitness centre opposite the mall entrance. According to the proposal, only the supermarket, Toilets and department store remaining will remain the same from the original infrastructure. The largest development would be the department store which is expanded in an easterly direction, where this will overtake land previously allotted for golf course and park and the car park. The fitness centre will also be demolished in order to expand the space for Carpark. There will be a new information centre in place of the cafe. The play area, Noodle shop, Cinemas will be demolished to make way for cosmetics and gift shops. The fashion store is added along with a new entrance to the department store.
The two maps
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show
the expansion of a shopping
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mall
to the
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southside
from its original infrastructure and additional
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changes
that
are planned
along with it.

Overall
, The plan is to
totally
extend the
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Mall
to the golf course and
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park
in order to
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allow
for new
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stores
and eateries and
in addition
to that the car
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park
is
also
expanded.

Firstly
, the shopping
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mall
consists of a Children play area, Noodle shops, Cinemas,
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Cafe
and supermarket along with toilet facilities and a departmental
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store
. There is a golf course and a
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park
is present in the east of the Shopping
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centre
and a car
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park
and Fitness
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centre
opposite the
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mall
entrance.

According to the proposal,
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only
the supermarket, Toilets and department
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store
remaining will remain the same from the original infrastructure. The largest development would be the department
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store
which
is expanded
in an
easterly
direction, where this will overtake land previously allotted for golf course and
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park
and the car
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park
. The fitness
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centre
will
also
be demolished
in order to expand the space for
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Carpark
.

There will be a new information
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centre
in place of the
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cafe
. The play area, Noodle shop, Cinemas will
be demolished
to
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make
way for cosmetics and gift shops. The fashion
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store
is
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added
along with a new entrance to the department
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store
.
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IELTS academic The two maps show the expansion of a shopping mall to the southside.

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