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The diagram show the financial industry profits as a share of business profits and pay per worker in the financial sector as a percentage of average compensation in U.S. from 1948 to 2007

The diagram show the financial industry profits as a share of business profits and pay per worker in the financial sector as a percentage of average compensation in U. S. from 1948 to 2007 9Bm1W
The line graphs illustrate the percentage of financial industry profits share as a business profits and spent per employee in the financial section as a percentage of average compensation in U. S. from 1948 to 2007. In 1948, approximately 7% of financial industry profits as a share of U. S. business profits. Then, it slightly increased to about 15% in 1958, after that, it fluctuated in between 15% to 20% in next 2 decades. After that, it dramatically rose and reached nearly 30% in 1988, whereas, it again decreased to 23% in 1998. Then, it sharply climbed between the years, and then dropped nearly 34% in 2007. In addition, around 110% of pay per worker in the financial section as a proportion of average U. S. compensation, in 1948. Then, it moderately declined about 100% in 1958, after that, it remained same to the next 3 decades. Moreover, it significantly increased and reached nearly 180% in 2007. Overall, it can be seen from the line graphs, financial industry profits as a share of U. S. business profits was fluctuate in given periods. However, paid worker in the financial sector as a percentage of average U. S. compensation, rose in last 3 decades.
The line graphs illustrate the percentage of
financial
industry
profits
share as a business
profits
and spent per employee in the
financial
section as a percentage of average compensation in U. S. from 1948 to 2007.

In 1948, approximately 7% of
financial
industry
profits
as a share of U. S. business
profits
. Then, it
slightly
increased to about 15% in 1958, after that, it fluctuated in between 15% to 20% in
next
2 decades. After that, it
dramatically
rose and reached
nearly
30% in 1988, whereas, it again decreased to 23% in 1998. Then, it
sharply
climbed between the years, and then dropped
nearly
34% in 2007.

In addition
, around 110% of pay per worker in the
financial
section as a proportion of average U. S. compensation, in 1948. Then, it
moderately
declined about 100% in 1958, after that, it remained same to the
next
3 decades.
Moreover
, it
significantly
increased and reached
nearly
180% in 2007.

Overall
, it can be
seen
from the line graphs,
financial
industry
profits
as a share of U. S. business
profits
was
fluctuate
in
given
periods.
However
, paid worker in the
financial
sector as a percentage of average U. S. compensation, rose in last 3 decades.
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IELTS academic The diagram show the financial industry profits as a share of business profits and pay per worker in the financial sector as a percentage of average compensation in U. S. from 1948 to 2007

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