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Accessing the news in Canada and Australia with pie charts

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The given pie charts provided show indicators of acceptable viewing capabilities for Australian and Canadian news. Overall, it can be seen that both countries receive most of the information online and on television. However, it can also be said that data dissemination on the Internet is relatively well developed in Australia, and such an advantage in Canada is seen in television. In Australia, data transmission over the Internet ranks first with 52%, and television comes in second with 37%. In Canada, we can see the reverse of the same sequence with 36% / 40% numbers from online / TV sources. In terms of other sources of information, Canada has a two-fold advantage over Australia in radio coverage and a more than three-fold advantage in print. In other types of information transfer processes without sources, there is almost no difference between the figures of 2% and 3%.

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 indicators of acceptable viewing capabilities for Australian and Canadian news.

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 that both countries receive most of the information online and on television. However
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 in Australia, and such an advantage in Canada is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
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 in television.

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 in second with 37%. In Canada, we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
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 the reverse of the same sequence with 36% / 40% numbers from online / TV sources.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
 terms of other sources of information, Canada has a two-fold advantage over Australia in radio coverage and a more than three-fold advantage in print.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
 other types of information transfer processes without sources, there is almost no difference between the figures of 2% and 3%. 

IELTS academic Accessing the news in Canada and Australia with pie charts

Academic

American English

5 paragraphs

146 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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