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a variety in distribution of household income

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The line chart shows information regarding a variety in distribution of household income between 1965 and 2015 on average. As It can be seen from the abovementioned line chart, while recreation, food, transport, gas (electricity) and home improvement incomes rose slowly started from the 1965 (and very likely - before that) up to the 2015, savings faced the general decrease from 11% in 1965 to the nearly 5% in 2015. Meanwhile the accomodation income has a low percentage in 1965 (almost 10%), but after a short recession rose up to more than 15% at 2015. A closer look to the chart shows that the social and economical conditions between the 1985 and 1995, closer to 1990, made accomodation income rise higher and more intensive, whereas savings income came to the more strong decrease. At the same time it affected the growth of food and home improvements income at the same point and, although gas (electricity) profits at first came to the recession and then had a better trend for the increase than all the incomes, except of the accommodation, mentioned above.

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shows
 information regarding a variety in distribution of household You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
income
 between 1965 and 2015 on average.

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seen
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abovementioned
 line chart, while recreation, food, transport, gas (electricity) and home improvement You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
incomes
 rose slowly
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started
 from the 1965 (and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
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before
 that) up to the 2015, savings faced the general decrease from 11% in 1965 to the nearly
 5% in 2015. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Meanwhile,
Meanwhile
 the Possible spelling mistake found.accommodation
accomodation
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income
 has a low percentage in 1965 (almost 10%), This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 after a short recession rose up to more than 15% at 2015.

A closer look to the chart This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 that the social and Did you mean "economic" (=connected with economy)?economic
economical
 conditions between the 1985 and 1995, closer to 1990, made Possible spelling mistake found.accommodation
accomodation
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income
 rise higher and more intensive, whereas savings You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
income
 came to the more strong decrease. At the same time it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :impacted
affected
 the growth of food and home Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "improvements'" or "improvement's"?improvements'improvement's
improvements
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income
 at the same point and, although gas (electricity) profits at first
 came to the recession and then had a better trend for the increase than all the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
incomes
, except of the accommodation, mentioned above. 