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A trip to the science museum

A trip to the science museum 7P0M3
As I said that we were going to the local museum the next Saturday, I have some words to tell you before that. I'll pick up you before 10 a. m and I will go in my own car that I have bought. At the museum, we can see dinosaur demonstrations. These include actual skeletons and remains from these prehistoric animals. And there is a life-size replica model of the colossal tyrannosaurus and brontosaurus, on exhibit just beyond the prehistoric timelines display in the main foyer. furthermore, they have a few amazing displays about ocean life as well that I very much expect to see them like their full-size model of a blue whale is in the main courtyard and we will go to a spectacular under the sea room. I suggest that you should bring a bottle of water or something that you can drink because there are no foods in the museum and before going there we will be going to have lunch so you have to worry. I hope you can go with us. great to you
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dinosaur demonstrations. These include actual skeletons and remains from these prehistoric animals. And there is a life-size replica model of the colossal tyrannosaurus and brontosaurus, on exhibit
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beyond the prehistoric timelines display in the main foyer.
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them like their full-size model of a blue whale is in the main
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we will go to a spectacular under the sea room. I suggest that you should bring a bottle of water or something that you can drink
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there are no foods in the museum and
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going there we will be going to have lunch
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IELTS academic A trip to the science museum

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
179 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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