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A solution for a concert hall which is burned

A solution for a concert hall which is burned yNYYV

Regrettably, the concert hall burned due to the fire. That prevented us from holding the movie awards ceremony at this hall. As far as I'm concerned, the cancelation of the ceremony will bring some disadvantages either for us or the city. Losses of millions of dollars, as an example. To not make a loss and to boost people's welcome, rather than rescind the ceremony we can hold it in another place. My suggestion is that the ceremony can be held at the largest park in the city. Since the weather is in a good condition in February it won't bother the audience to sit outside. I already consulted with our team and it was concluded that we are capable of setting the chairs, tables, and other items at that park. We will have better lighting. Also, it can be live on TV channels. In this way, it will provide watching the movie awards ceremony for everyone who doesn't access tickets.

Regrettably
, the concert hall burned due to the fire. That This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :precluded
prevented
 us from holding the movie awards You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunctionobservanceparadeserviceshowrite
ceremony
 at this hall. As far as I'm concerned, the Possible spelling mistake found.cancellation
cancelation
 of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunctionobservanceparadeserviceshowrite
ceremony
 will bring This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 disadvantages either for us or the city. Losses of millions of dollars, as an example.

To not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a loss and to boost This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
's welcome, rather
 than rescind the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunctionobservanceparadeserviceshowrite
ceremony
 we can hold it in another place. My suggestion is that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunctionobservanceparadeserviceshowrite
ceremony
 can be held
 at the largest park in the city.

“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
 the weather is in a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 condition in February it won't bother the audience to sit outside. I already consulted with our team and it was concluded
 that we are capable of setting the chairs, tables, and other items at that park. We will have better lighting. Also
, it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 on TV channels. In this way, it will provide watching the movie awards You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunctionobservanceparadeserviceshowrite
ceremony
 for everyone who doesn't access tickets. 