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shown two maps changes in Islip

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The given two maps show the center of a small town which is called Islip in the years 2010 and 2015. There are big changes between two year which in 2015 it got better and beautiful place. Moving to the details, in 2010, there was main road which you can go around in that road. When you start from west and go a little forward you could see shops in both sides of main road, walking to east side there is a school, going till end of the shops there is minor road which goes to the park. In 2015, it have settled dual carriageway for going around easily. There was new housings around. In shown year you don’t need to go back to main road for going from school to park place, it has been joined. The place where before in both sides there was shops, in one side it have been extended and built so many thing. For instance: bus station on left side in corner after it huge Shopping Centre and joined to it car parking place. In conclusion, center of Islip was different in 2010 and 2015. In year 2015 it has been beautiful and useful for people who lives there.
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show
the center of a
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small
town which
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Islip
in the years 2010 and 2015. There are
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big
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changes
between two
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year
which in 2015 it
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got
better and
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beautiful
place.

Moving to the
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details
, in 2010, there was main
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road
which you can go around in that
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road
. When you
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start
from west and go a
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little
forward you could
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see
shops in both
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sides
of main
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road
, walking to east side there is a school, going till
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end
of the shops there is minor
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road
which goes to the park.

In 2015, it
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have
settled dual carriageway for going around
easily
.
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There was new housings
around. In shown
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year
you don’t need to go back to main
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road
for going from school to park place, it has been
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joined
. The place where
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before
in both
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sides
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there was shops
, in one side it have
been extended
and built
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so
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many thing
.
For instance
: bus station on
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left
side in corner after it huge Shopping
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Centre
and
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joined
to it car parking place.

In conclusion
, center of
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Islip
was
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different
in 2010 and 2015. In
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year
2015 it has been
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beautiful
and useful for
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people
who
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lives
there.
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IELTS academic shown two maps changes in Islip

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  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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