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A New Hypermarket for The City Of Pellington

There are three proposed sites in Pellington shown in the map where a new hypermarket is going to be built. As can be seen, the population in Pellington is 120, 000 which is quite a large city. Hence, there is a need to carefully select which area is the most suitable. Firstly, site A seems to have the largest residential area in the region with a traffic-free zone and a medium sized park situated in the middle. Moreover, the industrial area in site A is also the largest compared to the same areas in site B and C. Next, considering site B which is on the east side of site A, around 80% of site B is countryside and the rest is for industries. There is a long and straight motorway dividing site A and B from the north to the south. Finally, let us consider site C. Site C has the second largest residential area in Pellington and there is an airport on the west side. Site A and C are separated by a long railway which is close to the traffic-free zone of site A.
There are three proposed
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sites
in
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Pellington
shown in the map where a new hypermarket is going to
be built
.

As can be
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seen
, the population in
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Pellington
is 120, 000 which is quite a large city.
Hence
, there is a need to
carefully
select which
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area
is the most suitable.
Firstly
,
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site
A seems to have the largest residential
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area
in the region with a traffic-free zone and a
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medium sized
park situated in the middle.
Moreover
, the industrial
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area
in
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site
A is
also
the largest compared to the same
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areas
in
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site
B and C.
Next
, considering
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site
B which is on the east side of
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site
A, around 80% of
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site
B is countryside and the rest is for industries. There is a long and straight
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motorway
dividing
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site
A and B from the north to the south.
Finally
,
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let
us consider
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site
C.
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Site
C has the second largest residential
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area
in
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Pellington
and there is an airport on the west side.
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Site
A and C
are separated
by a long railway which is close to the traffic-free zone of
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site
A.
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IELTS academic A New Hypermarket for The City Of Pellington

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  American English
2 paragraphs
187 words
5.5
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